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Don Schaeffer
Intermediate Member
Username: don_schaeffer

Post Number: 317
Registered: 12-2003
Posted on Friday, February 03, 2006 - 9:46 pm:   Edit Post Delete Post View Post/Check IP Print Post

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I am covered in earth,
dull haired, hope to be useful
but could fail at that.

Living three quarters of the way
to the edge of the world
where the sun
makes great arcs around
the border of the sky,

not able to smell
the flowers of the South
where winters
are soft,

could I drape
myself in white?
Can I be golden,
glistening sprays of myself
into the breeze,
exhale perfume?



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I am covered in earth,
I hope to be useful
but could fail at that.

I live three quarters of the way
to the edge of the world
where the sun
makes great arcs around
the border of the sky.

I don't smell
the flowers of the South
where winters
are soft.

Could I drape
myself in white?
Could I be golden,
glistening sprays of myself
driven in the breeze.
Could I exhale
perfume?


(Message edited by Don Schaeffer on February 09, 2006)
Gary Blankenship
Senior Member
Username: garyb

Post Number: 6566
Registered: 07-2001
Posted on Saturday, February 04, 2006 - 1:40 pm:   Edit Post Delete Post View Post/Check IP Print Post

Don, could be another winner. And congrats for the HM.

Smiles.

Gary


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Don Schaeffer
Intermediate Member
Username: don_schaeffer

Post Number: 318
Registered: 12-2003
Posted on Saturday, February 04, 2006 - 1:47 pm:   Edit Post Delete Post View Post/Check IP Print Post

Thanks Gary.
Laurie Byro
Advanced Member
Username: lauriette

Post Number: 1513
Registered: 11-2003
Posted on Thursday, February 09, 2006 - 2:53 pm:   Edit Post Delete Post View Post/Check IP Print Post

lovely don, just great

laurie

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